Wednesday, February 1, 2012

Snippets of Story: February

Hello all!  Today I am linking up with Katie for her Snippets of Story link up for February!  It's the first month of this, and I decided to join up.


The excerpt I'm posting is from my NaNoWriMo, tentatively called Dr. Blank's Traveling Circus for Talented Misfits.  So, without further ado, here we go.

"Hmm," clucked Lily, obviously not impressed.  "Papa always says we'll be the death of them.  We pull pranks 'a little too often' he says."
Gemma sighed.  "And Mama finds us simply ridiculous, and is constantly telling us to 'quit fooling around!'  Mama clearly doesn't understand what it's like to grow up in the circus.  You spend so much time on trains.  Sure, the shows are fun.  And training.  But while we're moving, we have nothing good to do.  Mama said we're not allowed in the training trailer anymore, not while we're moving.  I mean, it was only a little break."
"What did you break?" asked Ria, raising one eyebrow at the twins.
"Well, technically it wasn't us who ended up with a broken bone.  It was Roy.  It was his fault, though.  He was spotting us."
Ria laughed.
"And it was only a little break," pointed out Gemma.
"And what did you break?"
"His nose..." Lily said.
Ria laughed aloud at that.  "Only a little break?  I see," she said.
"Lily, I've decided I like her.  She's like Hugo, only funnier, and not as serious."
"I think so too," Lily said, nodding, and scrutinizing Ria.
"She has better fashion sense than Hugo," said Gemma.
"And she can hear you," Ria said.

I don't think I will ever edit this year's NaNo, at least, not for a while.  It was an experiment that, in my opinion, didn't work out.  So, while I finished, I didn't really like the end product.  However, there were little pieces of it, like this one, that I ended up quite liking.  Maybe I'll end up revisiting this story, and reworking it. However, I doubt it.

What do you think of this little piece?

The Dandy Lioness


  1. I like the back and forth between the characters. :)

    I feel similar about my NaNoWriMo project. I like parts of it (and the overall concept) but I don't think I'll go back and rewrite/revise it anytime soon.

  2. This was very fun to read. I think I would very much like these characters. The whole bit about a little break and the boys nose was amusing to read!

  3. First off, I love the name Gemma. I have a Gemma in one of my current stories, too.

    Thanks for participating in Snippets! This glimpse of your work is very humorous and endearing. A little break, indeed. ^.^

  4. This is a great piece I really enjoyed reading it :) I already like the charecters. "And she can hear you"
    haha it's also very funny :)